20.2.3 How To Review
Basics
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Start with the basics. All designs should contain an appearance, a dropped, and an examined description. The expectations for these are as follows.
Appearance: Lower-case first letter, commas are allowed, no more than 50 characters. Must contain the alias.
Dropped: Should form a complete sentence, with the selected alias for the design used as the main noun, making it obvious that the sentence is about that item.
Examined: Generally, examined descriptions should contain at least two sentences, and include the specific alias used. Basic grammar and spelling rules should be followed, and we strongly encourage designers use a service that checks text for them if they're not comfortable with it themselves.
Commodities
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When first reviewing a design, commodities should be set. Each item mentioned in the design that a commodity exists for should be accounted for in the commodities. Multiple uses of one commodity in the same design might be accounted for with an increase in commodity counts. Be reasonable, but thorough.
Alias
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Most designs have a variety of aliases available under the same pattern. Ensure that the correct alias is used to match the design. If the alias needed isn't available, contact Alend with suggestions.
Rules
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Try not to be overly picky. Ensure basic grammar and spelling rules are followed, but for incredibly minor errors, it may not always be worth rejecting over unless other errors are also present. If you're uncertain, contact Alend.
Tags
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When using variable tags in designs, they follow a specific order. $(TAG$) is always the correct order. Appropriate tags include:
$(name$)
$(him$)
$(his$)
$(thing$) (?)
In order to capitalise properly at the start of a sentence, you would use a + in the tag. For example:
$+(name$)
This is ONLY necessary at the start of a sentence. If you're uncertain, try using "a masked person" instead of the tag to see if it would make sense capitalised.
Extra lines
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Some types of patterns will have extra lines. Some of these are optional, many are not. If you're uncertain of which is which, send Alend a message.
Races
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Race names are not capitalised in Imperian.
Example
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The following is an example design. Please note the things mentioned in the above lists are all covered.
Alias: filet
Appearance: a lemon pepper trout filet
Commodities: meat 2 (pattern)
Dropped: Perfectly presented upon a white plate, a brightly garnished filet has been left here.
Examined: Resting directly in the centre of a simple white plate, this filet of trout has been garnished with an assortment of herbs in bright green and pure white. The filet itself is perfectly cooked, a light seasoning of lemon pepper visibly crusting its pale flesh.
Satiation: 20
Eaten 1P: You select a juicy morsel of trout from one edge of the filet, popping it into your mouth. The zesty lemon pepper is perfectly balanced, a bold flavour that plays well with the fish.
Eaten 1R: $+(name$) selects a juicy morsel of trout from one edge of the filet resting on a simple white plate, popping it into $(his$) mouth.
Eaten 2P: Pleased with the flavour, you flake a few more mouth-sized pieces away, consuming the delicate fish with avid interest.
Eaten 2R: Pleased with the flavour, $(name$) flakes a few more mouth-sized pieces away, consuming the delicate fish with avid interest.
Eaten 3P: Leaving only the flesh of the fish behind, you consume the last mouthful of trout filet, discarding the plate.
Eaten 3R: Leaving only the flesh of the fish behind, $(name$) consumes the last mouthful of trout filet, discarding the plate.
- The main alias for this pattern is fish, and has been changed to use filet according to the design.
- The appearance is only a phrase, not a sentence.
- The dropped forms a full sentence.
- The examined describes the dish completely. It conveys only the details, no subjective or unknowable knowledge regarding the cooking process or projecting emotions.
- Each of the basic descriptions contains the correct alias for the dish.
- Tags are used appropriately, only using a $+(tag$) when needed at the start of a sentence.
- The eaten descriptions avoid projecting emotions onto the eater.
- The commodities listed are sufficient - seasoning that does not exist as an item in the game (such as specific herbs) do not require commodities.
When Not To Reject
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You will always want to be respectful and polite when commenting. Designers are usually very attached to their designs, and will not take poorly-worded criticisms well. If you have difficulty in being polite and reasonable - because of arguments or any other reason - please escalate the design in question to Alend and send her a message with further details if required.
And occasionally, you will find a design that is just written a little poorly - perhaps there is nothing obvious you can see but it sounds wrong, or an extremely minor correction is the only one needed. If it will pass by general inspection, consider allowing it to proceed through the queue. We want to avoid approving writing that will draw attention to the errors, because it creates immersion problems. We do not want to nitpick designers out of their efforts. Be kind, and ask Alend if you're uncertain.